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Are You Superstitious?
Yea: 67%  67%  [ 2 ]
Nay: 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
Not As Is: 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
Abstain: 33%  33%  [ 1 ]
Total votes : 3
Total voters : 3
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PostPosted: Sat Jan 26, 2019 4:45 pm 
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Title: Superstitious
Poet: RavenoftheBlack
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Word Count: 264

This is for the voting "week" of February.

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PostPosted: Wed Apr 10, 2019 7:24 pm 
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This was quite riveting. I kept expecting it to turn really sour, as if some information was being withheld or imagery being recontextualized because of who the narrator was, and was pleasantly surprised when it both did end up with a hint of blood to come as well as not being as grisly as I was expecting. Still, a haunting little piece.

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PostPosted: Tue Apr 23, 2019 3:34 am 
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it seems like you're sticking with fairly strict sonnet form, so I have to ask: what's the intended scan on this line?
I put the orange leaf to my wound and clean.
because the only way I can read is in iambic pentameter is to treat "orange" as a single syllable, which isn't a thing I've ever really heard. is that the intention?

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